![]() ![]() Rena, for all her arrogance, has a good heart, and Kiyoshi, for all his hatred of the elite, is smart enough to see beyond the surface with her. The growing relationship between Kiyoshi and Rena could have been really improbable, but because those two met through Teru and hang out near each other because of Teru, it actually works very well when they start talking by themselves. Kurosaki himself is slowly changing from a guy who would act like a jerk to make sure there was distance between him and Teru, to a guy who can occasionally lean in close and sniff the perfume she's wearing without saying something that will completely ruin the moment. She's still intelligent, even in her more insecure moments, and she's still pretty funny, especially when she tries to seduce Kurosaki after a makeover by her friends. Now, in a series like Dengeki, you can start off a volume with Teru and her friends summarizing everything that isn't shown and having her friends lose it when they find out she hasn't even so much as kissed Kurosaki and it'll be called "breaking the fourth wall". The advice? Cut out their observations and make the story move. ![]() When I started writing several years ago (as if I'm some expert) I heard that the moment your characters start talking about how the story isn't moving, that means the story isn't moving. ![]()
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